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A Wealth of Geekiness
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A Wealth of Geekiness
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Rachael closed her eyes, took a deep breath, and jumped. She thought of missing the station and shivered, but she focused on her mission. She opened her eyes to look at her HUD which revealed a multitude of read-outs about her destination. She issued mental commands to her implanted commlink, and Alfred said, “Good evening, Miss Rachael. Would you like for me to knock for you?” Alfred’s voice mimicked that of a butler from an old movie, complete with snooty British accent. She had always wanted a butler, but this was all she would get. She gave Alfred mental acceptance of the offer. She was no hacker, but she knew her programs were now engaged in electronic warfare. She got close enough to the air lock door that she could grab a convenient lip, then halted her movement with her feet against the door. She waited patiently for Alfred to finish his job, and after thirty-seconds of eternity looking out at the vast blackness, she heard a doorbell chimed in her ears. The air lock door slid open. She flipped sideways into the air lock, and Alfred closed the door for her. A light above the door leading further into the station blinked from red to green, and the door opened. Three seconds later, Alfred said, “I am sorry, Miss Rachael, but they have discovered my intrusion and. . . .” As his voice cut off, she heard people coming down the corridor. It was time to dance. (By way of explanation, I wanted to make a really short story like one of the Chapter Openings in the new ShadowRun books. They have less than a page, which I figure is less than 250 words. This is 245. It was based off of the #FictionFriday Write Anything Prompt of “(Character) closed his/her eyes, took a deep breath, and jumped.” I hope you like it!)  Tags: #fictionfriday, alfred, commlink, rachael, ShadowRun, short story, space, space espionage, Writing
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Posted on 05:22, June 19th, 2009 by 
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You can't leave it there! We have to know what happens next . . .
Good teaser of a book. Hooked me real good! Always a sucker for sci-fi stuff.
check mine :
http://anandserpi.wordpress.com/2009/06/19/clarks...
An intriguing start, like Anand and Jabblog I'd love to see more. I'd love to find out what Rachael and Alfred are doing on that station.
being a big fan of Sci Fi, I was impressed with the richness of information you were able to bestow upon the reader in your Flash Fiction. Looks like you can't leave her there… you'll have to write the next installment for next Friday….. Visitors can see my FF entry here.
http://annieevett.blogspot.com/2009/06/aquaphobia...
I liked this a lot because it grabbed me in right away and left me wanting more — what was she doing, what did she do after the intrusion was discovered, what was going to happen next! Nice job.
AWESOME teaser. Loved it, but really want to know whats to come and what she was doing. IMO the "butler" was a nice touch